SEEL paragraph planning - Social Studies

Our social studies assessment is coming up, so we've begun looking at things that'll help us in the test. So far we've done timelines and mapping, but now we have to practice writing a SEEL paragraph about our findings from a map, timeline, and graph. First we talked as a class about what these three things tell us and then began working on a paragraph. 

The information on the graph, map, and timeline tell us that as technology advanced, the human population increased. If you compare the technological advancements marked in the time line and compare it with the population increase on the graph, they line up and can tell us various things about how the world has developed from the beginning of time to now. Most technological advancements made life easier for humans and allowed more relaxation. This is proven through the invention of Rome's aqueducts which moved water into hot baths, or how the printing press was created which allowed less time creating exact copies of written text. Because there is more time for relaxation, more humans were reproducing which meant there was a significant increase in population. As time goes on, the reproduction rate has gone down. This can possibly be because the societal pressure to have kids has decreased, this along with medical advancements can possibly be the reason for a decrease in reproduction rates. However we can't confirm this with the information that we have been given as the graph, map, and timeline only tell us of the human reproduction and technological advancements.